Gawking through binoculars
at a stellar glow
in the night sky.
It whirls like
A Celestial Body
revolving in orbit
in the vast milky way
illuminating the night sky.
Perched on the grassy
banks of the Contention
River, i see beyond
the ferigate a
stellar glow of
A Celestial Body
flittering real slow
athwart the night sky.
Upright on a warehouses
corrugated rusty
iron roof
once again i spot that
stellar glow in
the night sky.
I climb down via an old
rusty steel step ladder
drop to a cold, dank
laneway floor
between two warehouse
brick walls where
ghoulish shadows rule.
My coursing footsteps
echo off the dank
slimy brick walls.
I turn the corner
into another laneway
only to discover my
stellar glow is not
A Celestial Body
at all, but a whirligig
fixed upon a dirty,
smelly old white
garbage truck!.
(c) 2012 Windsmoke.
13 comments:
Hi Windsmoke,
Brilliant, I was right into the story and then you really got me at the end, was not expecting that one. LOL
That was a disppointing end, a whirligig on a garbage truck! I was expecting a UFO at least.
You're good at this.
Like River, I was looking for someething sensational - good to keep the reader on his toes, though! Fine writing.
Windsmoke, another good one. There is something about the night that makes a place seem almost like a parallel universe some times. Love it.
Yeah, I did not see that one coming! Great job!
I laughed at the ending. Nice work.
Dissolution is everywhere hey Windsmoke! Nice work.
Loved the twist in the tale. Thanks.
G' Day MAGS & BEACH: There's nothing like a bizarre twist at the end :-).
G' Day RIVER: A U.F.O would have been to obvious :-).
G' Day DAVE: Thanks for the vote of confidence :-).
G' Day FRUIT: Nightime does seem to be a world within a world :-).
G' Day ANDREW: Glad you got a laugh out of it :-).
G' Day GRACE: Absolutely :-).
G' Day THE ELEPHANTS CHILD: I'm glad you appreciated the twist :-).
Just goes to show, beauty can be found absolutely anywhere! :)
G' Day YGRAINE: Yep, beauty is in the eye of the beholder :-).
Haha! Love the way you've turned the tables!!
G' Day RED: There's nothing like a twist at the end that surprises you :-).
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