Saturday, October 08, 2011

Fair Dinkum Haiku 063: Stalactite.

Titanic cavern.
Ceiling tined with Stalactite.
Echo irate teeth.

(c) 2011 Windsmoke.


Elliot MacLeod-Michael said...

it must suck to be millions of years old. i would be irate too.

Cloudia said...

yes, Jonah!

Aloha from Honolulu;

Comfort Spiral

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Windsmoke. said...

G' Day ELLIOT: Absolutely :-).

G' Day CLOUDIA: That's me the adventurous one :-).

River said...

Nice one.
I remember in high school our science teacher reminding us which ones were stalactites and which were stalagmites by having us repeat many times "ants in the pants", because as he said, The mites go up and the tights come down.

Dave King said...

Extraordinary image in the final line. Surreal, but it works!

Beach Bum said...

Totally cool!

Never cared for caves, and now you have given an image to my fears.

Red Nomad OZ said...

This one had me counting the syllables - the poem was so full of images I thought it couldn't possibly fit the haiku template! Well done!!

Windsmoke. said...

G' Day RIVER: That's a novel way to remember the difference :-).

G' Day DAVE: I'm stoked you thought it was surreal as that's exactly what i was trying achieve :-).

G' Day BEACH BUM: Its not good to be fearful of anything, but now to have an image of your fear is even worse i suspect :-(.

G' Day RED: Writing Haiku can be most difficult and challenging at times :-).

Rudolph Aspirant said...

Hi ! I do not know much about poetry, but this haiku conjured up a lot of images in my mind, most pleasurable (but also tinged with some unavoidable claustrophobic anxiey) memories of actually vising some real caves in my life !

Since I noticed you like haiku's, here is a link to a hai-ku/haiga blogger of Japanese descent who also lived in Hawaii at some point in his life, whose blog I like to read & admire from time to time:

Windsmoke. said...

G' Day RUDOLPH: I'm glad you got the image. Thanks for the info on the Haiku blog and welcome to my humble blog and i hope to hear from you in the future :-).

Life Ramblings said...

i love exploring caves. There's nothing more mysterious or intriguing than a cave.

Windsmoke. said...

G' Day LIFE RAMBLINGS: Some may say exploring caves are scary and spooky, but i don't agree with that :-).